I'm very happy to show you all my new short film: Red Wine - a experimental piece about Alcoholics and how they are hidden in plain sight. Please plus - like and subscribe:) as it would really help me out:)
Don't listen to the jerks that are sending mean comments. It was good. You can tell that the man feels alone, and he feels like he's being laughed at. I've never had alcohol, let alone been an alcoholic, but I can tell he isn't an alcoholic because he likes the taste of wine. He's an alcoholic because of some outside force. Leaves the brain to contemplate what his story is.
sound mate nice first go tbf, you got some nice ideas narratively and visually - grade wasn't amazing, but i'll allow it bc you got some nice thoughts.
some critique, fam
1. why did you show so many damn shots of the same thing - i apreciate filmmaking is about showing, not telling, but you literally showed us every thing he did as well as multiple, unnecessary shots of the wine glass in every position.
2. google the '180 rule' - you broke it many times and it lost me - that's some basic-shizz-nit.
3. so...what are you even saying? alcoholics hide in plain sight? what's with the escalated laughing and crowd when nobody was even there? it isn't arty, it's bollocks and it is just gonna spin out your audience. feel free to PM me if you want some advice about narrative structure/story bc u need it, kid.
thanks... I think. I'll take any advice, but you started off giving advice - then called me wank and said I don't have a dog?
I understand some of your criticisms - the whole same shots was meant to be repetitive but if you feel it was too much than that's a fair point for me to learn on.
I know about the '180 rule' and broke it for a reason. When drunk people have no sense of direction and feel lost, and that's what I was trying to show and make the audience feel.
The whole message is very experimental - I wanted to show what happens when an alcoholic is hiding in plain sight by taking away the crowd. I kept the sound for a more distorted, confused emotion. And the laughing at the end was added due to after interviewing some recovering alcoholics, they expressed that they feel laughed at a lot of the time - I wanted to show that in an almost, horror like way - like the old 60s canned laughter.
If this isn't to your taste then that's fine, and I will take your comments on board for my next film - however calling someone wank and being patronizing isn't a good way to give constructive criticism.
(Also, this was filmed and edited over 48 hours for a competition)
none of your bizz kid but i have a faithful girlfriend and i've had one today - the only sufficient conclusion any tengaged user can then draw is that you are in fact the wank - you smell like wank, you walk like wank - your clothes are stained with you.
therefore, you are not a wanker, but wank itself. dogcalledzak
but yeah to conclude, the film was shit and you gotta step it up - the last thing you need is a bunch of people giving you online gratification. BE BETTER, wank.
What has any of this got to do with my film? And if you believe it's shit then that is your opinion. I do not believe it's shit - it could be better, yes, but it's not shit due to only having 48 hours. I'm proud of it and I can learn from it.
I do not need people giving me gratification, I instead need constructive feedback - something you are obviously not willing to give as everything you say is followed by 'wank'
hahahaha just look at my post history mate or check out my vlogs i don't give a fuck, the quicker you throw some shade back the quicker we're gonna get along - your film was good and i mean that - it's just hard for me to say anything without being a cunt you know? wank
Hi its good. The hidden message is lit. Here my comments for improvement.
1. The actor should be put more emotion or just simple character.
2. Other than the people noisy sounds and laughing maybe you should pan the camera to the empty seat at the last minutes of the film to make people clear and hit them with the revelation.
Overall good effort. Hope you do more. dogcalledzak
I like the concept and most of the realization, I just think you could've made better use of the wonderful colour palette on post production and if you used silence with the reaction sounds of everything he does it would make the idea that more interesting!
Thank you for your lovely feedback and comments:) Really means a lot and will defiantly take your feedback on board and learn from it:) As a starting filmmaker your comments really help.